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For she who understands
nothing but her own thoughts
what is a book that has no pictures?

Bored of the same old routine,
madness calls. it always does

Would you chase time
into a rabbit's hole?
When all you do is fall,
you just don't know
if the depression
you're falling
into is too
deep, or
if you're
falling
too
s
l
o
w
l
y

There's always a door,
waiting to be opened.
Opportunities are endless.
But sometimes,
you just don't have
a key that [fits].

She drinks the wine,
she takes the pill
And wishes she could
overdose in nonsense.

She walks into a world of wonder.
Curiouser and curiouser.
And even though
curiosity often leads to trouble,
she feels safe.

When she drowns in her fears
and gets out wet in pain.
She gets dry by running in circles
[inside] her mind.

Chased by illusions,
always in a hurry,
where are you now
dear Alice?

She finds out,
that even illusions are there
just to change her state of mind.
Confusing it is, she knows.
She runs.

Not even her mind is a safe place.
Not anymore.
Everyone wants to hurt her.
Off with her head!

She's out of her mind.
But she'll be back,
she's always back
into the rabbit's
h
o
l
e
.

If I had a world of my own, everything would be nonsense.
Nothing would be what it is, because everything would be what it isn't.
I contrary wise, what it is wouldn't be, and what it wouldn't be it would.
You see?
Inspired by Shinedown's song "Her name is Alice" and well (obviously) Alice in wonderland by Lewis Carroll

It's not that good but I needed to fight this writer block somehow.
I don't know if it's the right category :/ I don't think so.

The last lines on italics are from the book.

Thanks for reading (:
Comments and critiques are highly appreciated. <3
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GLTT16 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i love that song<3 and this piece(: beautiful as always
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, love (:
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cheese1815 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love wonderland! Amazing!! I love poems like these <3
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, and thanks a bunch for the faves.
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Blazer48 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Finally someone else on this site that listens to shinedown. Best band Ever. Also made me feel like i was in the Kingdom Hearts version of Wonderland. Ah memories. Anyway, this is really good. However the last 4 lines, if you were quoting shinedown's song, it acutally goes:


If I had a world of my own, Everything would be nonsense.
Nothing would be what it is, because everything would be what it isn't.
And contrary wise, what it is it wouldn't be, and what it wouldn't be it would.
You see?


Just a few words off but no big deal. I look forward to more of your work.
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love Shinedown, and I was actually quoting Alice in wonderland in general since those lines appear in every single Alice in wonderland thing I know haha
Thank you very much, love (:
And I'm way too lazy to change it, maybe later haha

Well, if you are I just submitted my latest piece (:
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Blazer48 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
I'ma check it now luv ^@^
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:iconwrite4me:
Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:3
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NicolaWingedDeity Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
For a minute there, I almost sreamed at Alice to run... Right before I remembered she was real and I was not-- N.W.D
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
N.W.D.? (Forgive my ignorance, please ^^;)
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NicolaWingedDeity Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
haha! no prob, everyone's reaction it stands for me NicolaWingedDeity N.W.D.... it's a quote I wrote sometime ago ur poem made me think of it (:
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:iconwrite4me:
Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, it's beautiful (:
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NicolaWingedDeity Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I can say the same (:
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:iconwrite4me:
Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:3
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Dirge-of-Fate Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L :)
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thankies, love :blushes:
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MoonlightWillow6 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011   Writer
This is incredible. I love the nonsensical feel to it. You've really captured the madness that is Alice in Wonderland. :)
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, darling (:
I'm glad you liked it <3
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LearningEverMore Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing, Darling,
I love it!!!
first stanza though "For she who..." not "for her who" okay? :)
fantastic
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, love
It means a lot coming form you (:
I'll change it right away ^^;
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LearningEverMore Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
haha :) you are very welcome!! it was only the truth!
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
(:
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MiniStella Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
Oh, wow...gorgeous! Just stunning....the creative effect of Changing the view, with words going down and smaller, really nice...

The take on it also nice....maybe Alice wAsnt dreaming, she was running from everything...great job! :)
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, darling (: it means a lot to me.
And thanks for the fave too <3
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MiniStella Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
No problem! ^^ i enjoyed it!
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ChocolateBall1 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
I never liked that book, Alice in Wonderland. Maybe because I just didn't get all the nonsense, despite the fact I love to be filled with nonsense. Eh, curious.

Love the poem. :D
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's my favourite story and also one of my favourite Disney movies (:
Thank you very much, darling. <3
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laurotica Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011   Writer
wonderfully written; a fantastical poem with elements of such a wonderful story. good job :clap:
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you liked it, honey (: thanks
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jadesfires Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011   Writer
This was so much fun to read. Great result of fighting the writer's block.
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, darling (: <3
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Nicolaas-G Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
Beautifully written ^^
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, love :3
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Nicolaas-G Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
You're most welcome ^^
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palindrome95 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011
i loved it, its really good!
:D
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, darling (:
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011
A wonderful piece! Amazing flow, and I just loved those last five lines.

Great job. :)
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha credit goes to Lewis Carroll for those haha
Thanks, love (:
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011
Oops sorry, I meant the last five lines of your poem.

You're welcome. :D
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Haha that's fine, thank you, darling (:
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WiltedLily16 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is truly truly amazing. ^^ I adore the way you changed the shaped, gave it the feeling as though you are the one that's falling. ^^

And personally, I love this poem. And I believe it is in the right category. ^^

Well done. :clap:
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Write4Me Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, love :3
I really appreciate it <3
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WiltedLily16 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome. ^^
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